Be Brief [W101]

Brevity is something I always contend with, so today’s challenge really stuck it to me. Even with the twist, I still hit over 250 words.

You stumble upon a random letter on the path. You read it. It affects you deeply, and you wish it could be returned to the person to which it’s addressed. Write a story about this encounter.

Today’s twist: Approach this post in as few words as possible.

An oddly folded piece of tan construction paper opened to a colorful exchange in crayon.

dear TitI,

i love ice cream!!! and ponies!!!!!



Very unique ponies with flaming hair and rainbow mottling herded around the jO’s carefully printed, heartfelt letter. Scanning the streets there was not a single child in sight or anyone remotely resembling someone’s aunt. My only company was a feral cat and her brood of mewling kittens. I couldn’t tell if the note was in transit to it’s sender or en route to it’s destination. Across the street, I spied an ice cream shop with a few customers inside.

Passing through the doorway, I waved to the clerk who greeted me politely. How long had it been since I stopped for a cone? I can’t remember. I saw a couple of children coloring together at a low table, with their tiny brows knotted in contemplation. Neither drew flaming ponies, but their limited color palette matched exactly. Turning to the clerk, I asked for a push pin, to tack the wayward letter to the advertisement board.

“How do you know they’ll come back for it?” the teen asked, perplexed.

“It could be ten minutes from now, or ten years later, but the right messages take time,” I replied, carefully pushing the tack through an empty spot on the paper. Before I left, I sat a few minutes and enjoyed some butter pecan on a sugar cone. Titi and jO did not return that day, but I heard a few weeks later the flaming ponies found their way home.

Word Count: 262
Assignment Date: September 19, 2014

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